Saturday, November 19, 2011

Susie and Dave


30 years since the facts 
became friction, I found myself
lost, more than most times before
sitting in my past, on a sofa
with Susie and Dave, they were friendly 

Susie liked to ingest cocaine
in a combustible format and was known
by many, to favor the barter system
some called her a crack whore
I called her my friend
Dave called her things, but mostly Q

He was ex-military, a misnomer for sure
for he insisted a lot from Susie
PUT MY LIGHTER BACK
LEAVE MY PIPE ALONE
GET ME A BEER
and she did, and sat right next to him
and they would collapse in each other 
after every hit, and hold on for the next 

it was Louisiana hot that night
I felt a coolness on my skin, my guard dropped
and flooded my sensibilities, 
we were talking and I let it all go, 
it was dramatic, 
to the point where they put down the pipe, 

the AC kicked off
and as sweat congealed with sadness, Susie touched me
not that way...more profoundly...
"you miss your Dad, don't ya'?"


I took her and looked in her eyes
deeper than oceans, and replied,
"no, I don't miss him...I missed him"

that was the moment in my life 
that saved me from sadness
the moment, when I knew what was wrong with me
all of the fractured windows and mirrors came back together
it was a moment never to be found, had I not made friends
with Susie and Dave, the crack whore and womanizer

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27 comments:

  1. ClaudiaNovember 19, 2011 at 2:33 PM

    this was one of the first pieces i read by you..and think it was also the one i spotlighted you with at one stop.. it touched me madly when i read it first and again..great piece d.

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  2. Brian MillerNovember 19, 2011 at 2:36 PM

    wow....powerful tale man...starts great with the fact/friction...and great capture of who they are giving us reason think why you are friends with them but that redeeming moment really comes alive...cool man...

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  3. AnonymousNovember 19, 2011 at 2:40 PM

    "the moment, when I knew what was wrong with me" that is the most powerful moment in life.

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  4. MaryNovember 19, 2011 at 4:05 PM

    Wow, you have set the scene beautifully, as you showed us all the lesson that you learned. One doesn't always choose one's teachers. Sometimes they turn out to be the ones most unexpected.

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  5. lynneNovember 19, 2011 at 4:12 PM

    While I have read this outstanding piece before, upon re-read ( and now that I am aware of him) this could easily have been written by Mr Selby, Jr.

    Not even sure if you are aware of your strengths in writing narrative.. this kicks *** (Selby would have left that word in:-)

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  6. knot eyeNovember 19, 2011 at 4:39 PM

    thank to all...I'm a little slow today

    I hope this conveyed the change I was aiming to reveal

    Lynne- you are too kind, but you do know my words quite well..grazi

    Peace

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  7. Brian MillerNovember 19, 2011 at 5:09 PM

    you made my day.

    smiles.

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  8. hedgewitchNovember 19, 2011 at 5:51 PM

    As others have said, I remember this--it's not the kind of poem you can forget. Perfect for the prompt, and a pleasure to reread. The facts so often become friction.

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  9. TashtooNovember 19, 2011 at 6:12 PM

    You never know when a teacher will visit or a how a lesson will be delivered. Good on you for not discounting due to the blatantly obvious...and here's to change, evolution, self realization and most of all love and acceptance.

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  10. knot eyeNovember 19, 2011 at 6:26 PM

    thank you Natasha...being open and available to unlikely sources is pivotal to change

    Peace

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  11. Laurie KolpNovember 19, 2011 at 8:17 PM

    What a revelation! This is so intimate and touching. It goes to show ya there's good in all of us and an innate desire to help.

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  12. VictoriaNovember 19, 2011 at 8:23 PM

    Wow,RD, this is heavy, perceptive. As I read it I kept thinking, "Gotta note this image..." Then another and another until I could have mentioned most of the poem. Like the characterization as well.

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  13. AnonymousNovember 19, 2011 at 8:25 PM

    Great storytelling! You never know where your angels are hiding.

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  14. knot eyeNovember 19, 2011 at 8:34 PM

    thank you all so much...I often wonder how Susie and Dave are doing?

    Peace

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  15. Dave KingNovember 20, 2011 at 8:18 AM

    Powerful. Strikes one as sincere. Finely written from a uniquely personal viewpoint. What more should we want from a poem?

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  16. knot eyeNovember 20, 2011 at 8:45 AM

    thank you Dave

    Peace

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  17. AnonymousNovember 20, 2011 at 10:39 AM

    That is just, well I really do not know, apart from the fact it touched me deeply. As a poem it flows deeply and has a known to many story. If true I thank God on your behalf for Susie and Dave , life savers.

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  18. knot eyeNovember 20, 2011 at 11:05 AM

    Thank you Willow...true and yes, I thank them as well

    Peace

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  19. Pat HattNovember 20, 2011 at 11:59 AM

    Never really know how others will affect our show and two who seem like the would not at all, catch you before you fall. There is some rhyme since you like it soo much at my place..hahaha

    Wonderful piece!

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  20. knot eyeNovember 20, 2011 at 12:15 PM

    Thank you Pat for stopping by
    I value your words and time
    'tis with a smile in my eye
    to read your heartfelt rhyme

    Peace

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  21. Luke PraterNovember 20, 2011 at 1:30 PM

    dude I always rated this as one of your most touching.. and loving that you brought your blog back brudder

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  22. knot eyeNovember 20, 2011 at 1:38 PM

    Thanks Luke...I'm working on it

    Peace

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  23. Yousei HimeNovember 20, 2011 at 6:05 PM

    There is value in every human connection, even the most unexpected. Thank you for sharing thi.s

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  24. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallNovember 20, 2011 at 8:01 PM

    nothing is better than the moment when you realize your mistakes and discover a new found self to move on in life.

    fantastic poetry,
    Happy Sunday.

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  25. knot eyeNovember 20, 2011 at 8:22 PM

    thank you TCS...it was a moment

    Peace

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  26. SheilaNovember 21, 2011 at 10:28 PM

    my angel-messengers never have wings or halos either. This is some fantastic writing! Can't wait to see more.

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  27. LydiaNovember 22, 2011 at 4:01 AM

    I relate strongly to this absolutely remarkable, nearly perfect poem. My first time here...will not be my last.

    Thank you for the meaningful experience of reading this poem.

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